Student Fourteen

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Comments

[kate]

10 second: love it! but- dude. you gotta pause longer at the end so i can read all that. i like your continuation of the hand-drawn lettering from your website tho. nice.

30 second:'bores and snoble' cracked me UP. once the character is in the 1st store, tho i think you could emphasize the robots in the background more... like put them in every aisle... or somehow justify the use of so many aisles before reaching the coffee machine (sidebar- i can't read what that machine says.. i'm sure it's witty and awesome tho...)
also- why does it take an hour for the dude to walk to the next book store? i think you could have it as close as next door and have him say "hm!" when he walks up to it... or something. and then have hime *sigh again once inside subterranean and turn into a human just by being there. he also needs to change where there's more whitespace- the background is distracting when he's standing my the books and in front of that other person... nice storyline and illustrations, tho.

[Alison Daake]

I really like both your ideas, for the 10 second, I would just slow it down. for the 30 second, I want to see more robots and maybe closer up? and maybe have the people move in the subterranean bookstore.

[Allison S]

On your 30 second, I love how he transforms into a robot! His walk works with that, but when he's just an actual person it kind of looks like he's skating when he walks. Also, when he walks into the bookstore, I got a little confused with the scale of the people because he walks in front of a much larger person (so I though he should either go behind that person or be larger in front of her).

On the 10 second, the animation is fantastic but it's hard to read the ending text. Maybe pause longer or make it less text.

[Ashley May]

10: love it, except i can't read that fast. the last frames should be up at least triple that amount of time.

30: wow. definitely could not tell that he was turning into a robot when we watched this in class. Maybe it would be more noticeable, and add another element of interest, if when he is a human he be in color and as a robot, in black and white, and everyone in subterranean books be in color as well. and tiny thing, it looks like he's walking right on top of that guy in the foreground when he walks over to the shelf in sub. books. it makes the illustrations seem ever flatter. not that flat is bad necessarily.

[Cameron Ballentine]

10 sec: I like the animation but the text went by way to fast. I also think that the subterranean guy should be a tad little lighter. He was a little hard for me to see.

30 sec: I think the way your character is walking is a bit distracting. And I think the robots in the background need to be more noticeable to really sell your idea.

[Chanel Thyson (CiCi)]

ten sec- i think your ten second ad at the end the information about the art opening or art gallery needs to be left on the screen... just for reading purposes.

30 sec- the guy looks like he is skiing rtaher than actually walking... and i dont really understand why he drinks the juice or water or whatever he drinks at Barnes and Noble... also i dont see a difference in his emotion of dress or anything after he exits b&N to go to subterrean... i thought like subterrean was supposed to b intersting and easy and fun.. but there is no real change in the main character dude that i can see...

i like the whole switch-a-roo of letters in the B&N name... thats funny... kind of a funny little tid-bit of comedy within the video... very smart! :)

[Jordan Worcester]

T-dog!
10 sec:
love the spotlight - draws me in. there is a lot of wording though, and I can't read all of it quickly enough and it's a bit small, but maybe that's just here on the blog? I do want to know why the light and the metaphor of a search for this show.

30 sec:
way to name well-known establishments with funny titles. awesome. the guy's walking is a bit more like skating, but i know it must be hard to make it look more realistic, we're all new to this! and he does overlap someone at the subterranean bookstore, maybe it's because he's all robotic and is just tramplin' over people like a maniac.

[Andrea Bailey]

10 sec: Good idea, and you pulled it off nicely! I only wish the end info would be up longer.

30 sec: Haha, Bores & Snoble... Ok, i was pretty confused with the robot-like walk at first. It doesn't really start making sense until he turns into a robot. Also, yeah, you might just give him wheels or something so he actually is skating?

[Megan Dowdy]

10 sec: I really think that this ad would catch my eye if I was on a website. Good job! The fact that I cannot properly read the text during the animation builds anticipation to make me want to read it at the end, with is good. Pause longer at the end so we can.

30 sec: I love the continuation of the hand-drawn quality. I wish that all of the text (including the comments from the robot) would continue this trend. I think the changes of the store logos adds humor in a way that gets your message across even further. I think the speed of the walk needs to be adjusted in Bores & Snobes- your guy is walking too slow to have passed all of the shelves in the amount of time that he did.

[Zachary Klotz]

10- i really like this ad, i just cant read it because im not given enough time, so slow that part down a bit.

30- really like "barnes and snoble." nice animation style. the only thing that really bugs me is that th robot/man, while in sub books, is in front of a girl whose not standing on the bottom edge of the frame, but the robo/man is, its just not right, and looks funny to the brain because occlusion is not happening properly.